The advertisement seems a little disjointed, but I'm not sure grammer changes would help that much. One thing that I noticed is the sentance about crabs. The author uses a dash where I would use parentheses. I think that the important fact is that they have five pair of legs, that the first pair is also used for defense seems secondary, therefore calling for parentheses.
Another thing that I might change is the part about vitimins A and D. I would use the dash here, because I think that to most people it is more important to know that those vitamins provide strong bones and teeth. I don't think that many people know what A and D are good for, so this information would draw more people's attention.
The last thing that I would change, is to add a comma after pink in the flamingo sentence.
I think that these simple changes could not only make the advertisement more correct, but could also help make it more effitient int fulfilling it's purpose of getting people to eat seafood.
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